“experience” as defined by Merriam-Webster: the fact or
state of having been affected by or gained knowledge through direct observation
or participation.
Art As Experience by John Dewey
“experience” is continuous, never ending action.
“an experience” is when there is an end of materials or end
of course
i.e. when
the problem attains its solution.
Main way that we speak of “real experiences” is made up of
situations and episodes from our everyday lives.
“experiencing like breathing is a rhythm of intakings and
outgivings. Their succession is punctuated and made a rhythm y the existence of
intervals, periods in which one phase is ceasing and the other is inchoate and preparing.”
Overall, I felt that there was too much wording. The main
point of the piece was lost over the redundancies; one or two examples can be
good, but to keep restating the same thing in different ways made me as the
reader feel not intelligent. I know that as a writer, you are faced with
attempting to communicate your thoughts to a wide audience, but I think fewer
examples would have brought about quicker impact+more important of an impact. I
kept reading each sentence hoping that it would further express what was being
discussed but it did not and in turn made me want to stop reading. Articles,
chapters, or other types of writing should always compel the reader to continue
reading, strive for change, and/or research the topic more in depth, not simply
reiterate the idea.
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